Comparing Changes - Second Page

In my feedback from my teacher on my second page it was noted that there appeared to be a lot of 'dead space' and so I filled this with a deal alert for the region I am focusing on. I also made the 'where to get' title larger and easier to see and highlighted the product names in a different colour from the rest of the text so it s easier to pick them out for the audience.

I think overall the feedback has led to a much stronger product and I will now use this as my final piece, after talking it through with my teacher to check there is no other areas that i could improve upon.

Comparing Changes - Billboard

It was mentioned in my chat with my teacher that my model's face was slightly blurry in the original piece of work which was quite distracting and made the work look a bit less professional. I took this criticism on board and used Smart Sharpen on Photoshop to sharpen the image (as you can see in the bottom picture). This has worked well to combat the blurry face and improves the overall look of the work. I also removed the 'Doll Up Magazine' logo at the bottom to give a more simplistic look. 

I think overall the feedback has led to a much stronger product and I will now use this as my final piece, after talking it through with my teacher to check there is no other areas that i could improve upon.

This Lesson

This lesson I have made a fair amount of progress in nearing my final products. I have made the alterations suggested to me by my teacher's feedback last week to three pages of my main product and by billboard ancillary task so I have achieved what I wanted to get done this lesson. Next week I plan on submitting these bits of work again for some final feedback, but I primarily want feedback on my website as this is the one area that I haven't had any on yet and I am feeling least confident about. 

Changes to my Billboard

It was mentioned to me by my teacher that my model's face was slightly blurry in the billboard I presented to her before so I have used Smart Sharpen on Photoshop to sharpen the image and I think this has worked well on sharpening her facial features slightly. 

My teacher also mentioned it may be worth removing the magazine name at the bottom to make it even more simplistic and I have done this and I think I may keep it this way as the website name tells us it is a magazine and if they don't get it from the term 'mag' in the url then the element of enigma may intrigue them to further research it. 

One last thing that was mentioned to me when I received feedback on my billboard was that it's not clear that the model is sitting on the horse, although I know this because I have seen the other pictures where she is in a similar position, and the full image this is from. She suggested that I might want to remove the horse, and I did consider this, however, a lot of billboards use enigma to intrigue the audience and I think that this could be one of the elements that acts as an enigma for my work. 

Changes to my Fourth Page

The feedback from my teacher mentioned that this page looked a little bare, especially as it has the focus image of my dole page spread on it. To fix this she suggested that I add in some sort of caption to my work, and that's what I have done here. As well as adding the caption in I have also added a small piece of text in the top left hand corner which tells the audience who the photographer and model were for these photos. 

Model Tag

 

It was suggested to me that I add in a tag line of the model's name and maybe a reference to the fact this is a beauty page, however, I wasn't sure whether it really added anything to the page. Here you can see a comparison between with and without this tagline.

Personally I prefer it without the tagline as I think it makes it look cleaner and more professional, however, I do think it would be best and the most professional if I credited the model so I'm going try out a few ways which I could do this and see what I like the most and what I think looks the best with my page. 

Today's Lesson

In today's lesson I am going to continue making changes to my work based on the feedback I have received from my teacher in order to gain the highest grade possible.